Quote:
Originally Posted by Alphapheemail
Topic:
“As Charles F. Kettering said, “The price of progress is trouble.””
Method: Present your perspective on an issue.
[tab]Society is a living entity that interacts with its environment like any organism. Evolution ensures that species have to adapt to the ever changing environment. Variation comes with specialization and this always leads to more complexity. Therefore, like any object that is highly complex and specialized; there will be corresponding idiosyncratic issues. However, without complexity an organism’s evolution can only go so far and for a society that could lead to stagnation. A society comes together to resolve the new set of issues that comes with an advancement. This promotes further development of improvements; thus allowing progress as a whole and revealing a new set of issues to tackle.
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A few issues:
1) Beware (especially in your topic sentence/paragraph above) of mixing metaphors and identity. Society is not a living entity. It's like a living entity. Also be careful of calling society an organism in one place and a species in another. Organisms adapt; species evolve. Keep your analogy clear.
2) You address the Kettering quote obliquely. You should address it directly at some point in the topic paragraph.
3) SHORT WORDS!
4) Shorter sentences, please. Break compound sentences (mea culpa, everyone does it).
The basic approach is good. Showing that progress is similar to biological evolution, and therefore is driven by failures is a nice idea.
Good Luck,
Jack Tingle
(who avoided the GREs by walking down the right hallway at the right time and inadvertently getting an MSME)