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wayspooled · 06-07-2009, 12:29 AM

I guess what I was saying was that it doesn't read as well with every sentence having the approximate same structure. If you prefer not to have the probably too large sentence in the middle like I first suggested, and I don't blame ya - I'm no writer - you might try restructuring your last compound sentence like this.

Instead of "Without complexity an organism’s evolution can only go so far; for a society that could lead to stagnation."

You might try "An organism's evolution can only go so far without complexity and for a society, that could lead to stagnation."

Or something like that. Whereever that pesky comma is supposed to go. I always have trouble with those, heh, told ya I'm no writer

06-07-2009, 12:29 AM	#39
wayspooled Crab In The Dark Posts: 486 Karma: 2328180 Join Date: Jul 2007 Location: Virginia Device: Tablet PC until a 10" comes out that I like	I guess what I was saying was that it doesn't read as well with every sentence having the approximate same structure. If you prefer not to have the probably too large sentence in the middle like I first suggested, and I don't blame ya - I'm no writer - you might try restructuring your last compound sentence like this. Instead of "Without complexity an organism’s evolution can only go so far; for a society that could lead to stagnation." You might try "An organism's evolution can only go so far without complexity and for a society, that could lead to stagnation." Or something like that. Whereever that pesky comma is supposed to go. I always have trouble with those, heh, told ya I'm no writer Last edited by wayspooled; 06-07-2009 at 03:28 PM.