Thread: Bad writing or is MY brain scrambled?
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Old 09-08-2023, 06:38 AM   #19
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From the snippets given, I'm unclear on what leads the OP to believe the action is taking place in the present tense in the first place. Every edit just seems like a conversion of a past tense narrative to a present tense one. Are there any non-dialogue examples from the book that would show the present tense narration you believe the action is taking place in?
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