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Originally Posted by DiapDealer
Sentences like this (especially in traditionally published books by fair to middlin' publishing houses).
"The sound of gunfire lit the afternoon sky as they prepared to leave."
I put the book down after coming across it. Still not fixed/changed in any new ebook editions after 10+ years.
Perhaps the author is a synesthete, but I doubt it.
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Along with firing regular arrows. Though people mightn't spot that.
Either "The flashes of gunfire lit the afternoon sky as they prepared to leave."
Or "The sound of gunfire echoed in the neigborhood in the direction of the sunset as they prepared to leave."
Neither is very good, but the original suggests typing didn't keep up with thoughts. Don't the big publishers now expect that anything they take is now finished, polished, to save them on employing editors?