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Originally Posted by dreams
I wasn't doing an edit read, just noted a couple of places where I was pulled out of the story.
[Between the 1st and 2nd charges.]
Shall we move on to the second charge?'
'There's more ? Isn't that enough? [here I thought it should have been a "?" used as it seemed to match his conversational pace and the missing question mark made me go back to reread the sentence]
'On the second count of treason and incitement to rebellion, you are hereby found guilty. You will, at a time of the our choosing, [remove "the"]
I didn't keep notes as I was pulled into the story and only really noticed the places where it pulled me out.  |
Thanks for the suggestions
Will correct immediately.
UPDATED: Corrections made. Much thanks to dreams for spotting them