Just caught up with the postings. Chp5 great, love this bit:
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The skull smiled, stared, laughed at her. She rose; eyes transfixed as all of the world was burnt to ash at that very moment. Constance turned her back to the heat and the night. Slow, deliberate, painful steps took her east and then half a dozen paces south of the flames. She bent down and her bones creaked with age, the weakness of death’s embrace.
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Chp6, don't see anything wrong with the flow at all. Reads good, pacy, I especially liked the interplay between Smelly and Graham.. that's very well written and pulled me in. You got that moment bang on as far as I'm concerned. Only one thing jars with me in the whole Chapter, the use oif this phrase - Dark and Stormy Night -- if I was polishin I'd change this.
Keep going, I want more.
