[Hitch]

Originally Posted by Gregg Bell

Oh, Hitch. You're such a meanie!



Now I realize you're baiting me (shame on you!) but just for the record: I have never been in the military. (But I could enlist--you never know.)

I'm not baiting you. If you haven't served, in any capacity, then I doubt you know enough about Seals--or any branch--to write a "regular" novel about them. As this is a send-up, a comedy, not a serious book, then it probably doesn't matter--altho, I'd argue that it takes more knowledge to parody something properly. I have served--and I'm 99% sure I couldn't write competently about the Seals.

I agree the blue needs to be toned down but actual "blue sky" (#007fff) is way too dark. And yeah, the orange works better but then I'll lose my "Navy" blue in the title, which actually I think works. So I needed the sky to be lighter but I agree that it's too light. I tried to take Granny's advice and add some green but it didn't seem to do much of anything. Blue on blue is the problem.

Whatever.

Here's a new one with a different font. (I thought the first font was too juvenile.)
It still has the blue problem though.

BTW I'm thinking of changing the title to:

NAVY SEAL RESCUE?

to obliterate anyone thinking that this might be a non-fiction book or a fiction book that is not a parody. It also plays into my story because the success of their rescue is very debatable. What do you think?

I gave you my thoughts on the title, and use of Seals, US Navy, etc., in our PM conversation. I think you'd be better off using different nomenclature--a made-up, obvious-parody name--but as I said, you're gonna do what you're gonna do.

Hitch