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Originally Posted by issybird
... Passing has that flaw of many first novels of being grossly overwritten. A good editor, or even a keen eye early on who alerted Larsen to the flaw, could have made a difference. I found the style rather off-putting from the start and then got to this:
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pouring the rich amber fluid from the tall glass pitcher into stately slim glasses
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It's just iced tea; no need to make such a song and dance about it. And what the heck is a "stately glass"?... |
I don't know. I'll see your "stately glass" and raise you one overly stimulated ocean. This is from next month's selection,
The Old Man and the Sea by Ernest Hemingway. (I don't think spoiler tags are needed as nothing pertinent to the plot is revealed here):
"Just before it was dark, as they passed a great island of Sargasso weed that heaved and swung in the light sea as though the ocean were making love with something under a yellow blanket, his small line was taken by a dolphin."