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If the chapter you uploaded was intended as a final draft, I would suggest you get an editor.
For example, it would be better starting at the passage beginning:
“Hit it, Wanda!”
which ends:
“It is, Lainey. It is.”
after which you could insert an (altered version) of the fight scene.

Textually, there's a major fault in that passage: "Was this day was never going to end?" and there could be many others in the entire chapter. I stopped reading after the second section.

I hate to say, but I would also stop reading if I was checking the "Look Inside" on Amazon. Everything seems so superficial, without real motive. Just what is Donovan doing to dogs which is so objectionable? Can I be bothered to find out? You haven't stirred my curiosity.

As to comments about ARF, it's not animal specific: Animal Rescue Feminists could refer to any species.

And the "seem to" has to go. This sounds like one of those dramas where someone wakes up in bed with a corpse and can't remember the night before. It creates doubt about whether she's actually killing.

UPDATE: posted this before reading Gregg's post #191