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Originally Posted by Hitch
Gregg:
I'm with the others. I think how YOU see the book is absolutely screwing with your design, which you're making somewhat clownish as if this is a "screwball comedy" a la the 1940's, with Carole Lombard, while your extract is DEFINITELY more Tarantino. I think using those goofy or silly or comic fonts is utterly misleading. You said you didn't want bad reviews from people who thought that the book was an Actioner, and then were put off by it being comedic, but...IMHO, you're overcompensating and making people think that it's a Lucille Ball Slapstick, when it's more Reservoir Dogs-meets-Rosie O'Donnell.
Just because your heroine shoves a stupid-looking trophy up some guy's nose doesn't make this Lucy in the Factory with Chocolates. At all. Nor does it read very slaptstick-y to me. Like I said earlier, if there's humor in that passage, it's more like when Travolta whacked the guy in the rear seat, accidentally or revived Uma with the Hypodermic to the sternum.
Lastly, having now read this extract, I would ABSOLUTELY use a tagline on the cover, something like "A Black Comedy," or "A Dark Humor," or whatever. I would not leave it as is, no matter what you do with the fonts.
And the clowny/silly fonts gotta go. Those two you used in your last pink-backgrounded iterations are screaming "madcap comedy!," and that's NOT what you've written.
Offered FWIW.
Hitch
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Well, I'm glad I found out now. I'll just start over. That first scene is uber violent. The rest of the book is not as violent. It's sillier but still, there's plenty of violence. I'll see what I can come up with. (At least I won't have to mess with these comedy fonts anymore!) Thanks Hitch