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Originally Posted by BookCat
Maybe "he's stealing Chicago's dogs" instead of "he's systematically stealing Chicago's dogs". Does the adverb really add anything?
Do you really need "clearly unacceptable" instead of just "unacceptable"?
Sorry, the editor in me has come out to play  |
Thanks BookCat. gmw suggested the "clearly acceptable" go and it did. I don't know though, I think the "systematically" makes it seem a little more sinister somehow.