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Old 01-10-2018, 03:02 PM   #20
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Maybe "he's stealing Chicago's dogs" instead of "he's systematically stealing Chicago's dogs". Does the adverb really add anything?

Do you really need "clearly unacceptable" instead of just "unacceptable"?

Sorry, the editor in me has come out to play
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