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Old 12-09-2017, 02:19 AM   #16
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[...] So I would say, do action and POV for the first person, and reactions only for the second so you're not doing a "Groundhog Day" on the reader. If there's one thing I hate is when writers do that. It's like, "I already read this. Why are you telling me twice!?" It made me actually change up some scenes in a series I'm working on right now to avoid that very thing, turning the second POV into nothing but a teaser for what was coming next rather than repeating it over again verbatim in the next book.
My current project faces exactly this problem, and that's where the biggest cuts and rewrites took place after the first draft. The story is told from three perspectives and where these are independent events everything is fine, but when the three come together it is difficult to get just the right mix: enough overlap so context is maintained, but not so much that people feel like they're reliving the story over and over (I like your "Groundhog Day" example). There is a part through the middle of the book where I think it is still less than ideal ... but I'm working on it.
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