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Old 08-15-2017, 07:03 AM   #18
JSWolf
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I'm not yet finished. I'm almost 1/2 done. One thing that's a little bit niggling is some of the odd stilted wording and strange punctuation in places. One thing I am not liking is the story being a documentation of what happened. That bit just doesn't work for me. I don't see any need for it other than to pad the word count.

Mr. Moto does not seem like the same character as I'm used to seeing. Granted, I'm used to some of the movies when I was younger.

I am going to finish this as I want to know what happens.
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