[Cinisajoy]

Ok, I am back. I read as much of the look inside as I could tolerate.
I must ask, who is your target audience? Adults or 12 year old boys?
If it is the latter, you may have a hit on your hands.
Your sentence structure could use some work. Some of your phrasing sounds like a very young man's writing.
The first sentence in your prologue is likely to turn off many readers.

You may have worked on your book for years, but between the cover and the prologue, it screams amateur.
Oh and your 4 and 5 star reviews are not helping either. (Friends or a cheap website for your arcs? )

I'm not trying to be mean, but your book needs some work before it is ready to publish.

Let me know if I am wrong on any of these things.
1. You made the cover yourself on a home computer using an easily found image and several common fonts. Or you used print master.
2. You ran it through word as a proofreader. Or you spent $5 for a proofreader.
3. Only friends and family saw the book before you published it.
4. You spent absolutely no money on this book.
5. You spent many hours writing this book and now consider it finished.

Once again, another one that might have potential if he chose to invest more than just a little time.

You also might want to grow a thick skin for when real reviewers read your book. Oh and don't snark at them, it just makes you look bad.