I'm a reader, not a writer, but I do like the sound of this and want to read this book!
Only one teeny niggle -- and it is probably only my own nitpick --- the phrase
Find out in Against the Eldest Flame!
juxtaposition of “in Against” to me is awkward, almost a stutter. How about something like:
Find out when you read Against the Eldest Flame!
That even adds bonus of involving reader in the action.
(okay, I will go back to my corner now)
Last edited by GrannyGrump; 04-11-2017 at 11:49 PM.
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