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Old 04-11-2017, 11:47 PM   #18
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I'm a reader, not a writer, but I do like the sound of this and want to read this book!

Only one teeny niggle -- and it is probably only my own nitpick --- the phrase
Find out in Against the Eldest Flame!

juxtaposition of “in Against” to me is awkward, almost a stutter. How about something like:

Find out when you read Against the Eldest Flame!


That even adds bonus of involving reader in the action.
(okay, I will go back to my corner now)

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