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Each winter the crew at the Shackleton South Pole Research Facility faces nine months of isolation, round-the-clock darkness, and one of the most extreme climates on the planet
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This is the kind of blurb that has me (virtually) running screaming for the horizon.
I assume that the author isn't really claiming that winter at the South Pole lasts for nine months or that there's nine months of round-the-clock darkness. Or at least I hope not, but that's what he seems to be saying. It's your come-on, your first and quite possibly last chance to make a good impression. Tweak it until it's exact, as close to perfect as possible. And then to wrap up the first sentence by saying that the climate is one of the most extreme on the planet.... Only the irritation engendered by the beginning of the sentence kept me awake through the ending.
Nope!