Hi Gregg! The second blurb is certainly the better of the two, but I'm in agreement with the others here about the need to polish it a little more, change "feeble" for something more suitable, and the like.
Actually, not that I have a desire to make things more difficult for you, but how wedded are you to the title? "Saving Baby" conjures up images of chick lit for me (interestingly, the proposed cover you had in your other thread would have been better suited to a chick lit novel, I thought!), when - judging by the information here - this is obviously a much darker book. I'd be looking to riff slightly more on the eugenics angle, and the idea of trying to pass something along (however unwanted) to the next generation. "Monroe's Legacy", maybe?
Obviously, this is probably a rubbish suggestion on my part, but I just thought I'd throw it out there. No offence meant or taken, I hope!
