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Originally Posted by meeera
The second is a lot better than the first. I'd rethink the term 'feeble', though. What do you actually mean? Thin? Sick? Floppy/low tone? Not hitting milestones?
(I'd also suggest having someone med-pick your manuscript, if you haven't already. For example, a baby that is truly in a lot of medical trouble often doesn't cry, but shuts down to conserve energy. Which is dangerous as it can be interpreted as 'a good baby' who is happy and satisfied.).
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Thanks meeera. I'm trying "weak" rather than "feeble." And yeah, the med-pick. I wrote a book that had a pregnant character and oh, did I hear it about how I had the details wrong. Fortunately, before publication.