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Originally Posted by ApK
Wow, I can't believe I missed this thread. Probably totally moot now, but what about a dash or two:
'Her vulnerability -- an inability to tolerate ridicule -- had led her to kill another human being.'
I think that makes it more clear that you are describing one factor, not listing two.
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Agreed. Parenthetical expressions (of which this appears to be an example) should typically be surrounded by em dashes or parentheses, not commas. Using commas isn't per se incorrect, but using them around such phrases makes the sentence considerably harder to read.
I might also suggest changing "an" to "the":
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Her vulnerability—the inability to tolerate ridicule—had led her to kill another human being.
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