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Originally Posted by meeera
I'm actually somewhat ok with that aspect of the sentence, as I reckon incipient can stretch to the earliest swelling of the belly. But there's a nasty dangler at the end:
"From the chimneys of scattered farmhouses and small stone cottages, smoke rose, straight as columns, up into the still air, and flocks of sheep, heavy with wool and incipient pregnancy, gathered around feeding troughs, stuffed with fresh hay."
(OK, OK, perhaps the sheep were stuffed with fresh hay. But I don't think that's what we were supposed to think.)
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I don't have any issues with that sentence. "Stuffed with fresh hay" is a predicate for the noun that it's next to, "feeding troughs". We could perhaps lose the comma between the two, but there's nothing grammatically wrong with the sentence.