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Originally Posted by issybird
Two grammar/diction questions:
Is Lily the hunk? If not, that sentence needs to be fixed.
Is there such a thing as partially complete?
Generally, the diction and punctuation should be cleaned up and tightened before you send this out.
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The 'partially complete' issue may be similar to the 'horribly mutilated' issue I read about quite often.
