Thread: Feedback on a query letter please?
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Old 11-04-2015, 06:44 PM   #3
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Two grammar/diction questions:

Is Lily the hunk? If not, that sentence needs to be fixed.

Is there such a thing as partially complete?

Generally, the diction and punctuation should be cleaned up and tightened before you send this out.
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