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Originally Posted by Rizla
My take on it. I've changed / reinterpreted stuff because I felt it needed the extra sounds in there. But overall very good. You have a good base there.
I like the existing title. I'm surprised it hasn't been used before. Sure, it's not obviously "suspense" but it's good.
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Your version is growing on me. It ties the paragraphs together better. I'm liking it more and more. (Thanks!)