The second version (post #11) sounds much more interesting to me ... but I still have complaints (some people are never happy
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The first paragraph I find awkward (and the first sentence in particular). It seems to say interesting things but I think it could flow better.
I'm not really sure what to make of the second paragraph. In some respects it's sort of intriguing, in others I find it a bit off-putting (overly contrived or something), and I'm thinking it's either too much information or should be worded better.
The third paragraph could almost stand in for the blurb on its own. Okay, so maybe not quite, but close.