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Her vulnerability and inability to tolerate ridicule had led her to kill another human being.
Kiss (Keep it simple, stupid). The meaning was perfectly clear in the original, but was longer winded than it needed or wanted to be.
IMO the edited down sentence is fine. "There is no greater urge than to edit another person's work."
Last edited by Rizla; 10-22-2015 at 09:09 PM.
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