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Old 10-22-2015, 08:21 PM   #23
Gregg Bell
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Originally Posted by AnnGirdharry View Post
hello Gregg,

Actually I have a preference for
3) = another way

Her vulnerability, her inability to tolerate ridicule, led her to kill.

because -
The final 'had' hammers the sentence too hard and takes out the immediacy (the reader intuits this is in the past)
human being ?- well, if it's a suspense then the reader will intuit also that she killed a person (and not a dog, cat etc.)

best,
Ann Girdharry
Hi Ann. I agree that that ",had" is a big hit on the sentence. "led" is much better.
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