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Old 10-21-2015, 06:26 AM   #13
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Originally Posted by Gregg Bell View Post
Her vulnerability her inability to tolerate ridicule had led her to kill another human being.


#1) Her vulnerability, her inability to tolerate ridicule, had led her to kill another human being.

#2) Her vulnerability, her inability to tolerate ridicule had led her to kill another human being.

#3) another way

#1.

Write it without the clause and there's no problem:

Her vulnerability had led her to kill another human being.

To add the clause, you need to have both commas.

Her vulnerability, her inability to tolerate ridicule, had led her to kill another human being.

Although I would prefer a small change to

Her vulnerability, an inability to tolerate ridicule, had led her to kill another human being.
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