Thread: how would you punctuate this sentence?
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Old 10-20-2015, 10:14 PM   #8
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Originally Posted by cromag View Post
"Her vulnerability and inability to tolerate ridicule had led her to kill another human being."

This could be considered re-punctuated (I removed some) and only slightly rewritten.
That's the way a good writer would write it.
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