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Old 10-20-2015, 07:32 PM   #6
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Originally Posted by Gregg Bell View Post
That's really good, rjb, but I didn't ask 'how would you re-write this sentence?' I asked, 'How would you punctuate this sentence?'
I did #3) another way and punctuated it with one period.-)

But if you want the same words I might go:

Her vulnerability -- her inability to tolerate ridicule -- had led her to kill another human being.

or your #1) Her vulnerability, her inability to tolerate ridicule, had led her to kill another human being.
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