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Old 10-15-2015, 03:40 PM   #158
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Originally Posted by Cinisajoy View Post
I am not liking the first sentence. It reads too much like erotic romance.
Please remember that the first lines are all that will show on the book page.
Note the baby lines won't show up without clicking read more.
Thanks Cin. Hmm. Thanks.
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