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Old 10-15-2015, 12:59 AM   #157
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There's a problem with both of them. The first paragraph is all present tense: "is stoked", "thinks it's the perfect". The second paragraph is past tense: "was wrong". Then the third paragraph is back to present tense again.

Other than that ... no, I don't really like those ones as much as the previous two choices.
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