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Old 10-09-2015, 03:42 AM   #130
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Seventeen-year-old Annie Rebarchek is on the run with a baby. The police are closing in.

Annie thought the nanny position she’d landed working for billionaire Houston Monroe was the perfect summer job. She was wrong. Now she’s finding out what life is like with the world turned against her.
The book I would want - and I believe you're not planning to do a major structural edit, so this is pie in the sky, my editing wishes had I been your editor/advisor from the start - would be to start with the teenager on the run, right there in the dangerous moment, and to not know whether the baby is hers, or whether (and why) it is sick , because that's where the suspense is. I would want all that dropped gradually in clues, not necessarily in flashbacks, and definitely not in a prologue:earlier-body structure.
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