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I may not go so far as Hitch, in suggesting you rearrange the book, but the blurb definitely needs a hook. Something difference or distinction or intrigue to grab the reader's attention.
The conflict between not wanting to give the story away but still wanting to give enough to interest the reader is a problem I'm all too familiar with. It's one reason why I suggested looking for other hooks - like something based on Monroe, for example. But this new line of thought about being on the run with the baby offers possibilities.
A line like this:
It may be her first job, but even Annie knows that a nanny shouldn't have to steal the baby just to save its life. But what choice does she have?
Isn't quite so explicit (or dramatic) as what you first suggested - about being on the run from police. It only hints that that is where it will go. Perhaps that is a suitable compromise?
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