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Originally Posted by Gregg Bell
[...]I once had a very short blurb for my romantic suspense novel The Find. Here it is:
What can a mother do when she has no money and a dangerously sick kid?
She can make a mistake.
In a moment of desperation, cleaning lady Phoebe Jackson tries to pawn the diamond-bejeweled Rolex she found in a mobster’s locker. Turns out the watch is a fake, but the mobster isn’t--and he’s on to her.
But then a very popular book review blogger told me it was too short.
So I came up with this:
[I]
She found a watch. A monster found a plaything.
Looking for love [...]
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I like your second, longer, blurb better than the first - and that's because of your opening hook. I read that and there some immediate responses: What could these two sentences have to do with each other? This sounds interesting/nasty, it could be a fun read.
And so I would happily read more of your blurb.