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Old 10-07-2015, 06:46 PM   #93
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Your version is definitely tight. But I found I had to backtrack to figure out what was going on a bit. The baby is sick and fading fast. I was like, What baby? Annie wants to help I was like, Who is Annie?

You eventually tell us but I don't think I should be wondering right off that bat.
You're supposed to wonder "What baby?" and "Who's Annie?" aren't you? Isn't that the point?
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