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Old 10-07-2015, 06:03 PM   #90
Gregg Bell
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Originally Posted by Cinisajoy View Post
Gregg,
I thought of a couple of things.
The first sentence comes across as a FSOG knock off.
(Potential buyer quits reading)
Also, the neglected baby is a big turn off. It makes the billionaire look like nothing but an a**.
(Potential reader says nope not reading because it is horrible. )

Not to mention you gave away the entire book in the blurb.
Well the billionaire is an a**. He's the bad guy. And yeah when I dwell on it I can see the FSOG thing but it never crossed my mind till you mentioned it.
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