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Originally Posted by Gregg Bell
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Seventeen-year-old Annie Rebarchek has always been intimidated by men in positions of authority. She tries to live up to a promise to her dead mother to overcome the problem, but so far she’s failed miserably. So when she gets a summer job nannying for billionaire Houston Monroe’s infant son it’s shaping up as the ultimate test of her resolve.
But something’s wrong.
Monroe’s baby is terribly ill and crying constantly. Inexplicably Monroe won’t let Annie comfort the baby, and there’s talk of it being raised according to ancient Egyptian child-rearing philosophies. Before long, Annie suspects that something bad, something terrible, is happening.
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I don't usually read this forum as I'm not a writer, but this thread caught my eye, as I love to read suspense and thrillers. So I'm sticking my oar in.
There's too much here. I'm thrown now by "ancient Egyptian child-rearing philosophies"--I'd immediately pass on this book because it sounds too out-there and weird. I'm baffled by the addition of information about Annie's being intimidated by authority--what teenager wouldn't be intimidated by a billionaire? (I already feel like I'm going to have to suspend disbelief to accept that a billionaire is hiring a high school kid for the summer.) I also don't like the addition of a promise to a dead mother--in your initial blurbs, Annie seemed to be motivated by her compassion for the child, but this gives her a different, less compelling motive. My impression of the character is less favorable in this current blurb than in the earlier ones.
Some things I would like to know right off the bat: Is Annie a live-in helper? What kind of household is it? Who else is around (baby's mother?)? I'd like to know generally how isolated Annie is. I'm thinking it sounds like one of the classic gothicky setups where the innocent young woman comes to a sinister house as a governess and risks all to save the child. If it's NOT that, I'd like the blurb to point me in another direction (horror? supernatural?) so I'd have some idea what to expect.