[Dr. Drib]

You know, I read one page of "The Test" to see what your writing is like and, in my opinion, you certainly don't have an issue with grammar.

Your 'issue', I think, with this synopsis and all its various incarnations is that you're trying too hard to 'get it right'; in the process, there is the inevitable tightening of the sphincter muscle. This results in grammatical issues such as a comma-splice and the over-the-top summary of your book reliant upon too much hyperbole.

Here's my advice:

1) If you're married, take your wife to a nice dinner and a good movie. Make it a comedy. (She'll thank you later.)

2) Sit down at your computer THE NEXT DAY. Do NOT look at your earlier copy. THROW IT AWAY. START FRESH with what you want to say in your synopsis.

3) If you're a drinking man, when you finish congratulate yourself and have a drink.

4) If you're not a drinking man, get a cup of hot chocolate.

5) Resubmit your revised - and NEW - copy to this thread.