Thread: Suspense blurb feedback?
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Old 10-01-2015, 07:47 PM   #26
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Originally Posted by Dr. Drib View Post
Hmmm...picks the baby up with pliers.....I like it! It sounds like my kind of story!
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Originally Posted by Cinisajoy View Post
Gregg,
Still not real great. Matter of fact, your insistence on her not holding the baby could turn off many readers.
I've now developed an unfortunate image of young whats-er-name holding this baby with those giant Barbecue Tongs, that you buy when you get your first grown-up big-time gas grill. A la: http://www.amazon.com/GrillPro-40240.../dp/B001E5C7IS .

Is she holding the baby on the cover? If so...

Perhaps you, Gregg, could try something like...."Inexplicably, Monroe's bizarre child-rearing instructions (or dictates--that's a good word, if you want to convey his power) only make it worse," or some such. So you don't get into weirdness with pesky things like "how does she care for the baby, if she can't pick it up?"

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