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hello Rizla,
For me, run on sentences read and sound alright in moderation - as long as the writer knows how to use them to effect and not as the main writing style of the whole book.
In the example you give, the main sticking point (for the reader) is not knowing the relationship between the woman being talked about and the talker.
If you've made this clear before and we all by now know the quality of their connection then the sentence will (I feel) sit nicely, since we will understand the feelings of the speaker and where this sentence is coming from (emotionally speaking).
If, however, we know nothing or little of their connection, this sentence may tend to jar the reader or irritate them.
For me it's about build-up and context. Then, IMHO run-on sentences can actually sound pretty good and give the effect of 'immediacy'.
have a good day,
Ann Girdharry
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