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gmw · 07-27-2015, 10:02 PM

I think the example was probably intended to be a parenthetical phrase. As in:

There was nothing friendly about her (she contained no softness), so why was she trying to help?

The problem being that the centre clause reads as a complete sentence. So a correction that might avoid changing the writer's intention could be something like:

There was nothing friendly about her, no softness at all, so why was she trying to help?

07-27-2015, 10:02 PM	#5
gmw cacoethes scribendi Posts: 5,818 Karma: 137770742 Join Date: Nov 2010 Location: Australia Device: Kobo Aura One & H2Ov2, Sony PRS-650	I think the example was probably intended to be a parenthetical phrase. As in: There was nothing friendly about her (she contained no softness), so why was she trying to help? The problem being that the centre clause reads as a complete sentence. So a correction that might avoid changing the writer's intention could be something like: There was nothing friendly about her, no softness at all, so why was she trying to help?