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Oy. You have a glaring grammatical error and a spelling error (repeated) in the above. It doesn't fill the gentle reader with confidence.
OK. You've said, several times, that you wrote the exact story you wanted and that it's perfect as is and can't be improved. There it is, then. Carry on.
But since you refer to a three-star and a four-star rating as affirmation, I'm going for the reality check. Aside from any stylistic issues (you say style, other posters say just wrong), I think the story is quite bad. I read the preview and it's preposterous, frankly. A worker in a homeless shelter decides on her own authority to place a stray child who just showed up in a foster home? Are you serious? What about the police? What about child welfare? Is this an alternative universe and it's just not apparent yet? Because this is not how this world works. Even if I thought your style the equivalent of Proust's, I would call foul.
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