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Old 07-19-2015, 11:23 AM   #8
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Many such combinations can strike me as odd if I dwell on them. But in this case it felt nearly cliche. A quick web search for "roared in terror" brings up a host of examples.

Besides, this sort of construction is essentially lazy. Writers are taught, good ones anyway, to use very few internal-state descriptions like this. Show us terror, not tell us terror.
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