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Old 07-03-2015, 12:43 PM   #6
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I'm with cromag and gmw on the dialog.
Dialog facilitates the "show, don't tell" maxim.
You can say a character's responses were angry and sarcastic, but it's far better to have him actually say things that are angry and sarcastic. That's let's the reader learn that about the character 'first hand.'
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