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Originally Posted by murg
"The shadow from the lamp cord cast a pall over the shadow from the lamp itself, barely illuminating the framed picture on the wall, while the doorway remained in deeper shadow, with just shadowy hints of what was in the shadows beyond. The victim had obviously committed suicide, or at least that's what someone wanted the world to believe. There was no stool or chair or anything for the victim to have propped themselves on before taking the leap into a shadowy death, although that it could have been kicked aside into the shadows at the periphery of the room. The victim's bruises stood out as shadows of an attempt at defending itself. The fact that the noose had a right-hand twist to it, and the victim was the last remaining orphan from its hand added yet another clue that this was no simple suicide, but a murder staged in the shadows of a dark, sad, shadowy room, by perpetrators who clearly crawled out of the shadows of the shadowy underworld, slithering this way and that ion the shadows to avoid the clear light of the day."
Do you mean like that?
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That is pretty good for a tried attempt at lengthening things out - even if you may have tried to make fun of it. Write a whole book like this AND keep the reader hooked is going to require a high skill and should be rewarded. All so often there is not enough scenery, only the bare bones story.