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Originally Posted by Kasper Hviid
Thanks - I know my grammar is slightly disastrous. Getting it repaired is high on my todo list.
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Actually--and I'm not trying to pile on here-there are quite a few errors in the description. (FYI: although it's become commonly misused,
a "blurb" is not a description of the book. A blurb is when someone gives you a short critique or comment or praise, which is in turn placed on the book, either on the back cover, front cover, or praise page.) Back to the issues:
Disturbances; emdashes don't have spaces around them; at least two possessive apostrophes are missing (Petria's); clunky construction ("which for her has shown to be way too physical"); missing words ("She much rather ignore the mystery altogether").
I didn't download the excerpt and read it, because if, in endeavoring to entice us to read it, you made this many errors in the description, I'm not hopeful for the extract. I'm sorry if that sounds harsh, but you may as well get used to it now.
I'd highly recommend that you join a GOOD critique group. I usually tell people to join one of the Holly Lisle courses, both because the courses are good, and the big forum, the Writer's BootCamp, is heavily moderated so that you get viable, useful feedback from the participants, all of whom are seriously working on books. There isn't anyone there that's sitting around waiting to "be mean" to other writers; they're serious about their craft.
It's my opinion that the speed with which authors are able to be published nowadays has hurt their development as writers, because they no longer do writing courses, critique groups, writing buddies; they don't submit articles to magazines to stave off starvation while waiting to be discovered, and then have to suffer the slings and arrows of commercial editors (which is invaluable training); they don't go to writing conferences, (ditto). The best way to emulate this (other than doing this, for which most people no longer have the patience) is to use a good writing group, and to obtain solid critiques--and use them.
Best of luck to you. Your genre isn't really my cuppa, but your
premise sounds amusing, if you can work out the kinks.
Hitch