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Old 04-19-2015, 10:21 AM   #1
Kasper Hviid
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I have started writing a some lesbian horror erotica titled The Padlocked Bedroom.

Here's the Blurb:
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Blond, tall and slim, Petria looked more like a fashion model than a psychic medium. Britt, plain and and chubby, knew that this doll was out of her league, and most likely prefered men. However, the gorgeous psychic is most interested in the paranormal disturbences in Britt's apartment. Britt is scared - she does not share Petrias drive to explore the unknown, which for her has shown to be way too physical. She much rather ignore the mystery altogether. However, Britt is horny - if it takes a haunting to get Petrias attention, she's game!
Anyone wanna take a look? I'm only 2500 words into the story, but I'd like to know if I'm on the right track here.

Download link: The-Padlocked-Bedroom.epub
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