Interesting... I'd like to beta read it. I'm a writer myself -- worked as a copywriter for more than thirty years, and my own first novel is about to be published (in Dutch, I fear; I'm from Holland).
One small comment: īn the above fragment, "Tanner" appears to be a main character. Roger Zelazny's novel "
Damnation Alley", also an SF-novel about outlaw biking, features a protagonist called "Hell Tanner".
Did you choose the name for that reason? If not, perhaps you'd want to change it.