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FWIW I much preferred the new blurb in post #1.
It was short and crisp.
If anything, I wasn't sure about the last sentence. May be a bit much to introduce 3 characters in a blurb?
As for the blurb from post #4, for me it is too verbose. It also feels like it tells too much of the story itself.
And it's less intense, direct and visual, e.g. "expensive bejeweled watch" vs. "diamond-bejeweled Rolex".
For me the phrase "Turns out the watch is a fake, but the mobster isn't" is light and not pretentious and the mild "smart-alec" character of that sentence that would not look good in the book itself is perfect for a blurb.
However, I do not read romantic suspense so I'm possibly the wrong audience...
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